Re write: "She never seems to succeed even though she works hard." with However

What part of the body of the essay shows the argument of the writer

Read Josh's draft.
Floating Entertainment
During the mid-19th century, before television or movies existed, people enjoyed forms of entertainment that are no longer common today.
For example, people who lived in areas along the Mississippi River that were far from large cities depended on showboats. Showboats were boats
on which plays were performed
An actor named William Chapman was the first person to build a showboat. He called his showboat the "Floating Theater." Actors lived on
the boat and traveled along the river. The showboat stopped at small towns to perform plays.
Showboats were very popular but were discontinued when the Civil War began in 1861. They became popular again in the late 1870s.
However, by the early 1900s, many settlements along the Mississippi had grown into larger towns with dance halls and movie theaters. As a result,
Mississippi showboats began to lose their appeal. By 1910, people were heading to movie theaters big time.
Josh wants to revise his last sentence.
Is Josh's decision to revise his last sentence correct?
O 1. No, because the information in the sentence provides a strong conclusion,
O 2. No, because the information in the sentence is essential to the topic's main idea.
O 3
Yes, because the sentence includes a factual statement instead of a personal opinion.
4. Yes, because the sentence contains slang and differs in style from the rest of the draft.
Question #4
Language 2-12 CA 2010

If students would like to be part of the class play,